A Revision

Tuesday, April 11, 2006

A Part

The ending was...
wrapped up tightly and placed in my arms
determined, confident, strong,
only a few minutes old and there she was...

shouting, reciting my list of complaints,
my lack of new dresses, my lack of new friends,
I was not aware she was even listening
from the back carseat.

She calmed down after she had thrown the stone
that hit me on the head; she had my attention at last.
I am getting a little better at not covering my ears
from the Child who throws Idealism.

Feel for our salvation,
the wonder of the first few moments
before we were separate.

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At 7:54 PM, Blogger FRIDAY'S CHILD said...

Nice poetry about idealism. This is really true even in real life. i hope I don't come to the point where someone has to throw stones at me for me to be able to hear them.

 
At 8:26 PM, Blogger J. Andrew Lockhart said...

wonderful!

 
At 9:22 PM, Blogger Carol said...

Friday's Child,
Teenagers are good for the soul.

J. Andrew,
Thank you, veteran.

 
At 11:20 AM, Blogger Artpuppy872 said...

Great!!!! I love this! Did you write this?

 
At 11:48 AM, Blogger Carol said...

Art Puppy 94,
Yes, that is my baby girl.

 
At 4:16 PM, Blogger Stephen said...

Great work!

 
At 7:46 PM, Blogger Barbara said...

I really enjoyed this. I hope you share more of your poetry with us.

 
At 11:01 PM, Blogger Carol said...

Thanks Stephen!

I will, Barbara.
You have got me hoping to hear some of your poetry. It is National Poetry Month, you know.

 
At 8:45 PM, Blogger David said...

National poetry month? I thhoughit was adopt an ilegal alien month... har har

word verification wants xlznvpyu
this is so not fair!

 
At 9:12 PM, Blogger Carol said...

Come on, David, join the haiku party.

 

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